Mar 24, 2011

Second Crusader Challenge - Flash Fiction

The second Crusader's Challenge is a dooozy. I have to write, in 100 words or less, a flash fiction piece beginning with "The fishbowl teetered . . ."  

Seriously?

Do I have to?

I've never written flash fiction IN MY LIFE!  

*sigh*

So here goes!


The goldfish bowl teetered on the edge of Jody’s dream, floating on a bed of white fur. She reached out, tracing her fingertips along the cold glass rim. It felt so real. So fragile.

She leaned forward, pressing her nose against the side of the bowl and watched the tiny bubbles rise to the surface and pop. First one. Then another. Each formed by the puckered lips of her chubby friend, Bob.

Bob winked. Then meowed.

Jody woke with a start to find her cat, Fiona, dipping a paw into the fishbowl where Bob frantically tried to escape her claws.

So that's it. 100 words on the dot. Let me know what you think, then click HERE to go read all the other entries.

20 comments:

  1. Sierra GardnerMarch 24, 2011 at 10:55 PM

    I like this one - may be the first dream one I've read. I love how the dream makes sense but doesn't (feels like the real deal to me!)

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  2. Summer RossMarch 24, 2011 at 11:42 PM

    Great dream scene- LOL I like the meow in the dream- i think I would be startled awake to if a fish sounded like a cat.

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  3. Amanda MilnerMarch 25, 2011 at 12:36 AM

    Neat! I like it. ☺

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  4. TrishaMarch 25, 2011 at 1:26 AM

    Poor old Bob :P Glad she woke in time. hehe

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  5. alberta rossMarch 25, 2011 at 3:16 AM

    a happy ending great - wonderful feeling of a dream - well done

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  6. Cally JacksonMarch 25, 2011 at 3:54 AM

    You definitely captured that surreal dream feel. Well done, I enjoyed it. :-)

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  7. Cherie ReichMarch 25, 2011 at 7:45 AM

    Aww! Very cute! :)

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  8. Carol RiggsMarch 25, 2011 at 9:06 AM

    A dream! Haven't seen that one yet; nice take. You did fine! I'd never written a flashfic either. See how good this challenge is for us? LOL

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  9. Crystal CollierMarch 25, 2011 at 9:18 AM

    Very nice. Isn't flash fiction fun?

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  10. ali crossMarch 25, 2011 at 11:09 AM

    Ha! That was a good one, Christine! And the picture is PERFECT!

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  11. Witless ExpositionMarch 25, 2011 at 1:22 PM

    It's always funny when reality creeps in on our dreams. Love the fish meowing.

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  12. Margo BensonMarch 26, 2011 at 11:40 AM

    Great flash piece - love the dream!

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  13. Alison MillerMarch 26, 2011 at 2:22 PM

    Great dream piece! Very clever!

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  14. jkraus8464March 26, 2011 at 5:39 PM

    Nice to see a dream one. (Mine was sort of a dream) Very well done. Your word choice is really clean and tight. The action was good and you built tension throughout, even in 100 words. Glad you tried it. You did a great job.

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  15. Susan FieldsMarch 26, 2011 at 8:34 PM

    Great job! I'd never written flash fiction before this challenge either, but it was actually really fun.

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  16. AnonymousMarch 27, 2011 at 5:13 AM

    Awesome! Love how surreal it is.

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  17. AnonymousMarch 27, 2011 at 7:40 AM

    Loved this line: "...watched the tiny bubbles rise to the surface and pop." Great imagery.

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  18. Kari MarieMarch 27, 2011 at 3:53 PM

    Oh what a fun dream sequence. Great job.

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  19. Elizabeth MuellerMarch 28, 2011 at 9:37 PM

    ooh, you're GOOOD! I love this! *hugs*

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  20. AnonymousMarch 29, 2011 at 4:39 PM

    Naughty kitty! ;)

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