Now I'd like to talk about another problem the agent thought I had--beginning the chapter/book with Kira (MC) looking in a mirror. The agent's exact words were:
"This made me cringe. VERY cliché to open with looking in the mirror."
Okay, I totally get that, because some writers, especially when the book is in first person, will use a mirror so the character can describe themselves. A big NO NO, right? But I didn't do that. Here's the first few paragraphs of my book:
“You’ve come a long way, Mouse,” Kira said to her reflection in the bathroom mirror. It was sarcasm, of course. It had been six months to the day since her mom left town with her flavor-of-the-month boyfriend, leaving Kira with an empty apartment, no job and nowhere to turn.
Kira used to think Mouse was a loving term of endearment—until she’d overheard her mom talking to her boyfriend about her runt-of-a-daughter who was always underfoot. She’d wanted to prove her mom wrong by being strong and independent, but instead she’d become exactly what she swore she’d never be. From her mousy red hair to her worn-out sneakers, she was her mother’s daughter.
She leaned in, almost touching her face to the mirror, and wrinkled her nose in her best impression of the little rodent. Then she promised she’d try to get out more—the same promise she’d been making her reflection for months.
Kira flipped off the bathroom light and wandered into the living room. She sat at her desk in the most comfortable chair in room—the only chair, actually.
Kira was merely "reflecting" on her life and how she hadn't changed, even though she really wanted to. It was a moment of clarity for her, because her world will soon be turned upside down and will never be the same. She'll have to make a decision to either stay stagnant and live a life of seclusion or break away from that life and take chances--to LIVE her life.
So, I'm curious what you think. Is this cliche? I actually have an easy way to fix it, so it's not a HUGE deal, but I would like to know what you think and if you read this, if you'd CRINGE.